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Posted by JME10135 - 1 month ago


The sound of rain

Sends me to you

I wrote a letter once

It came from the sky

To the dewdrops of roses

Till it fell apart in your hands

The music they bring

The droplets of rain

Makes me smile

A bittersweet smile

Wanting to see you

One last time

Where are you?

What are you doing now?

Will you come back?

I hope you will

I miss you

I love you

Till the rain stops one more time

Yet the eyes of mine can't refrain

The tears falling down my cheeks

As I weep and sigh

And imagine that our goodbye

Would have never been

Yet for now I'll listen

To the fall of rain

As once again

I cry If only it were so

That I could tell you again

How much I love you


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Comments (2)

This was surprisingly fluent! You really capture a melancholy sadness too. I like how it progresses overall, except for a couple places, first...

Yet the eyes of mine can't refrain
The tears falling down my cheeks

...and...

As once again
I cry If only it were so
That I could tell you again

...where the words seem to jump, and the structures a bit longer/richer in syllables than the rest. But overall very nice. Wonder who this was written to...

idk i didnt think of anyone special when i wrote it i guess it could be about anyone

Maybe a subconscious special someone. :)